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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 13, 2011 23:30:01 GMT -5
There's problems when you try to do more than one center tag in one post, or a center tag over a few lines. I don't know why.
You are? I'll ready it for tomorrow and put it up
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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 14, 2011 20:25:00 GMT -5
 Conceptual Bindings is nearly finished! |
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Post by Louisa on Apr 14, 2011 22:31:07 GMT -5
Yeah! And I have no idea why it does that.
And where is that which was promised for tomorrow, when it has been a day since?
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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 16, 2011 1:11:14 GMT -5
........I forgot?
So, this is Piano Man from Kyles POV. Mainly put up here so I can get Austine to look at it and tell me whether it's too confusing.
Kyle Tanner
Kyle was just a lonely boy who was uin nthe wrong place at the wrong time. At 14 years old, he’s beginning to reach that time where everything seems to be changing. He feels a small rebelliou sprit awaken within him-something which he doens’t know will get him into more trouble than he ever imagined.
Constantly, he is asking himself two questions. Why doesn’t my father love me and why don’t I have any friends? He attempts to get his father attention various ways, but nothing will drag him away from the phone and computer he always seems to be connected to. He reaches out to people at school, hoping that he can at least get some socialness there, but everyone seems to hate him and wlll hardly talk to him. Hurt, withdrawing into himself, he wanders hoem, where that rebellious spirit is awoken.
His father asks him to get some breadl, passoing the money to him but never looking away from the computer screen, and, grudngling, he accepts. When he’s out though, swinging the bread around, he wonders why he should go back home. He loiters around, knowing that he’s disobeying his father but not really aring. He almost feels happy-at least this way he will get some attention.
He is kidnapped while there. Waking up in the room of what seems to be a luxious mansion, he comes face to face with Riley, a n Italian man. He is tied up, and struggles against him, demanding to know where the hell he is. The overwhelming emotion here must be fear. Riley hits him, and demands to know where his mother is. Kyle is baffled. He has no clue who his mother was-wasn’tshe just a teenage mother who left him? He begins to wonder about her, and tries to listen in to the peoples converstations. Riley is grabbing his chin and leering at him, which begins to make him even more scared
Quickly, he meets Snatagio. Immidately, the tension between him and Riley is evident. Santiago is much rougher than Riley, but when Riley jumps in to try and protect Kyle, he is shot in the shoulder, something which Kyle has never seen before. A gun and death threat to Kyle makes him even more scare,d but he still has no idea what they want with him.
After numerous days wtih bother Riley and Santogio (wuth other men in the room) he begins to wonder how he can get ot of here. The next time Riley comes in, Kyle launches himself at him, but Riley is full defended and pins Kyle to the ground. Leering at him, almost raping him, Riley is only stopped when Santiago comes in. Santiago suspects what has gone one, but syas nothing, only interrogating Kyle once more, this time asking him about his grandmother.
The weeks go on, and Kyle can still give them no information. When they’ve gotten everything they can out of him, they call in everyone and let Kyle be beaten to “death” before driving away with his “corpse” and tossing him into an alley somewhere else. A kind old woman finds him and drives him to her house.
Under Sarsh guidance and care, he begins to heal. Talking to her, he finds out that she is his mother sister, and she tells him the story of her sister. He tells her about the men who kidnapped him for the money, and you can see hwo troubled she is just in her face.
He wakes up one night to find her cocking a gun. He asks what she is doing, and finds out that she is going to kill the men who kidnapped him for his safety. Somehow, he manages to talk her out of it.
She is beginning to get quite unwell here, and asks him to call up her granddaughter. While she doens’t tell him what this is for, he knows that she is dying. Her granddaughter comes up to stay, and she brings a friend with her, Violet. While talking and getting to know Vivian (the granddaughter) Kyle tells her about what has happened to him and what could possibly happen to her.
At Sarahs funeral, Kyle finally confesses his love to Violet. Sligtly shocked, he finds them the next day gone, and is sad. Word is out that he survived as well, and he sees Santiago, and his men, looking for him. He calls up Violet, insisting that he has to talk with her friend, Vivian, and she agrees to help smuggle him out
He goes back to NEgland on a ferry, and waves goodbye to both of them, depressed that Violet refuses to return his love. Once he is back there, he confronts his dad about the men, and his dad, sits down and tells him everything. They discuss the problem of how to handle the men, and his dad, sighing, gets his two friends who know about the problem to go with him, guns balzing, into the area. While they all die in it, the people trying to kidnap Kyle die as well, which is good.
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Post by Louisa on Apr 16, 2011 14:42:08 GMT -5
Poor kid! And the granddaughter and her friend, their names are very similar, and it was kinda hard to know which one was which. My 2 cents
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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 17, 2011 3:42:21 GMT -5
Mm, I know. That's going to actually be needed in the plot now though.
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Post by Louisa on Apr 17, 2011 11:44:38 GMT -5
Ahh! That makes more sense!
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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 17, 2011 23:23:23 GMT -5
Well, [Piano Man] is all planned out. Starting work on it tomorrow...
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Post by Louisa on Apr 18, 2011 8:15:09 GMT -5
Yeah!
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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 18, 2011 20:45:03 GMT -5
Or not. Plans changed. I'll work on it tonight...
Being attacked by folders!! AHHH!
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Post by Louisa on Apr 18, 2011 21:31:02 GMT -5
Ok  And haha What folders? |
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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 18, 2011 22:25:14 GMT -5
Our school has these personlised folder thingys that I had told fold. Folding 200 of them and trying to fit them all in the box...well, they kind of overflowed and attacked me! Gah!
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Post by Louisa on Apr 18, 2011 22:49:19 GMT -5
Ahh. Fun! Haha |
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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 19, 2011 9:32:28 GMT -5
Not so, trust me1
Started [Piano Man] late today-well, yesterday night. I've done 1.2k on it, which is good. I'm only setting a revised goal of 60k this month-NOT going any higher!
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Post by Louisa on Apr 19, 2011 11:28:24 GMT -5
Yeah! And haha, race you to the 60k (me 160k, but still! ) |
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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 19, 2011 18:22:21 GMT -5
...Maybe. I don't really want to rush my writing-I have the time now to be laidback and just do it whenever I want.
Speaking of which, wrote 1.2k on [Piano Man] yesterday
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Post by Louisa on Apr 19, 2011 19:06:13 GMT -5
Yeah Good for you! And ok |
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Post by marsbareater12 on Apr 21, 2011 20:13:12 GMT -5
Okay, 7k left to go for April!
Kyle's taken up residence in my head. He's an annoying ass-shut UP Kyle!
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Post by Louisa on Apr 21, 2011 20:42:32 GMT -5
Yeah! And haha!
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Post by marshmellowmnms on Apr 22, 2011 4:58:34 GMT -5
Lol, nice with the only 7k left Mars.
Anna says she's about ready to go (and I quote [rem.ember, she's usually the calmest of my troupe]) "ape-s**t" on him. As it were, she's pacing and Murphy is trying to talk her down..... (Anna says) Tell him to heed my words.
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Conceptual Bindings is nearly finished! 
